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リトルヴィエイユと彼女のリードパイプ

Vielle seemed to have procured a strange new toy, well, actually, it wasn't really a toy, rather it was something that she reallyy shouldn't have gotten hold of. Her new 'toy' was a lead pipe. Being her mother, I have no clue on how it is she's gotten hold of a lead pipe but I do know I wasn't home when she obtained it. Nevertheless, I do often try to seperate her from something I see as unsafe but, knowing Vielle, who is a stubborn as infants come (she is a year old by the way), seperating her from the lead pipe is easier said than done, that, and its landed me with hands bruised, much to my misfortune. For some reason though, she thinks it is a rattle of some sort, despite the fact that it doesn't really make a noise besides a faint hollow sound when air passes through it. At least, she figured out that the pipe isn't edible and neither does it taste good. Either way, I will find a way to substitute that 'toy' with something less dangerous.

Much to my chagrin, she's taken to hitting people with it. As should be noted, Vielle often hits people on the head with rattles and stuffed toys, something that doesn't cause much if any harm, as a playful gesture, however, lead pipes are something that can do harm and Vielle doesn't know that. Often, this has gotten her yelled at, causing me to defend her. I don't defend her actions but I do defend her, as she doesn't know any better. When I tried again to take it from her, she promptly screamed and hit me on my already bruised hands, turning the other one almost completely blue and red. Naturally, I screamed to show that I was in pain, as she mostly responds to noises. Her eyes widened in surprise but she still didn't hand it over and promptly climbed off the couch, with pipe in hand, and crawled under something that I couldn't get under. She stayed like that for awhile until she fell asleep. Gingerly, I promptly took the pipe from her hand and replaced it with a rubber toy hammer, something that wouldn't bruise my hands when she hit me with it. I promptly gave the pipe to Toki, who put it the metal recycling bin.

As she was doing that, I had a thought and promptly asked, "Toki, is there a chance that Vielle might have gotten into that?"

Toki looked at me and said, "No, because I keep it outside and the only way she could have gotten into the metal recycling bin would be that she had to have found a way outside--Wait, a minute!"  

I followed her eyes to the cat door, which was big enough for Vielle to fit through. It seemed one of us in the house must have left the cat door unlocked on accident. It turned out Brownie had left the cat door unlocked so the cats could come in where it is cool.

As for Vielle, she never did figure out her I had switched out her favorite toy for a new one.
A story I was writing that is centered on Doki and her one year old daughter Vielle, who, for some reason, obtained a lead pipe
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Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Hi,  You recently honored me by choosing "Birthday" as a favorite.  Also am happy that you did so cause I can take a moment from my admin duties and look at your gallery.  I came across this piece and would very much like to give you a tip I have learned when writing.     At first glance  everything is good for a txt doc.  but then as you read, you find that two people talking in the same paragraph.   As I lean English it is easier to read when you seperate the two people speaking.  Look in books and you will see.  It also makes it more interesting to read.   Example below, the name I took from yours, and the rubber hammer,  I couldn't write exactly what you did. 

As Toki laid the rubber hammer on top of the drum, he turned to me saying, "Vielle might be here tonight"

Turning my head away from my home work, I replied, "really, are you sure?"

Because txt documents don't let you indent, you skip lines.  You don't have to take my tip, just though to offer it because you were kind enough to choose my picture.  Anyways Much thanks.
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AkaiChounokoe Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm, I think you are referring to how deviantART formats written documents, when you said something about txt files.  Anyway, I shall resolve the error at once. Also, Toki is a she ^_^
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Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Yes, DA uses a txt format as it is a common format that you can't use to write code so it is pretty safe.  Problem is you can't use formatting which makes documents look good.   You didn't make an error.  I was trying to help you make it more inviting.

This is something I wrote, maybe you can understand the ease at which it reads.  fav.me/d5qfgsa, or fav.me/d5rnp5t   Am hoping have not offended you,  I am new to English also, but have had to translate my writings in Chinese to english, then move from a Rich formate to a dull format.
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AkaiChounokoe Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh no, you haven't, rather you just pointed out some writing errors and got confused. Actually, English is my native language, I tend to write things as I would probably say it. Also, not all translators are really good (assuming you've used internet translators), so you may have worded and spelled something correctly and the translator messed it up translating it. Here's something that could probably help you: Grammar and Spell Checker at Reverso.com rectofy the errors in which the translators might have caused.
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Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I no longer use a translator, and the one I used was not internet but one used by professionals.   But thanks for the link about grammar but I won't be using it.  I learned to read and writ english by listening to audio books while having the written word in front of me.  To try and learn proper sentence structure, or grammar, that is a little more then have patients to know.   When used to reading from back to front, or top to bottom.   And since I don't have to worry about how bad I sound while talking.  It's would be a fruitless effort.


Oh, thank you very much for choosing two of my pieces of literature as a favorite.  After you read part one of Con Tikitiki, part two is also posted.  I would love to know what someone things about them.
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AkaiChounokoe Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, okay, you're welcome
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